Notes Part 1
As I stated last week, I did a quick read through of the previous manuscript of Crow &Soul. Below is a rough sketch of what I took away from it.
Page 1. I need to put in a background for the storyline. The name of the planet that this story unfolds is called Corvus. The main characters, as far as I can tell, are Father, Daughter, and the Wizard Brothers. I’m not entirely sure if the Crow takes an active role, besides being mentioned. There will undoubtedly be some minor characters that’ll come into play as I get into rewriting the manuscript.
Page 3. Poem: Shall We Dance. This is the entering piece. Basically saying, after the reader knows the background of the story, this is the first scene or song of the storyline. The two speakers in this poem are Black Wizard and Daughter.
Page 7. Poem: Land of the Crow. Take out Crow and his marshals and put in Crow &Company. Second, this is a conversation between the two wizard brothers.
Page 9. Fool- Hearted Plan. This is a conversation between the two lovers (daughter and black wizard). They discuss on how they plan to kill the Crow.
Page 11. Lust. Should this poem go before previous poem on Pg.9? Second, this poem is sexual in nature.
Page 12. Legacy. I don’t see the significance of this poem. Second, if this poem is to be used, then it should be one of the earlier poems. Perhaps before page 7.
Page 14. Let’s Runaway. This poem is taken from Daughter/ Lady Fair/Lover’s point of view. She’s talking to Black Wizard. Second, either this poem should come after a fool- hearted attempt on Crow’s life or they abandon that plan on Daughters pleading. Third, the Land of Milk and Honey, is the seventh world. It is home to the One Who Saves.
Page 16. Daughter’s Forgiveness. This poem is an interaction between Father and Daughter. Father ends up shooting Daughter with the same pistol he later gives Nosos (he doesn’t appear in Crow & Soul) in the novel.
Page 18. Factory Red Panic. This poem deals with Father killing Daughter. Second, lover runs to Daughter. Crouches down to see how she fares.
This wraps up this week’s blog. Next week I’ll continue with the review, and then write up an outline for the first stage of the storyline.
